I finally got my portfolio up and running! Theme/decorations are still a work in progress though... Check it out!
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I finally got my portfolio up and running! Theme/decorations are still a work in progress though... Check it out!
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| Source: Pixabay |
Hi Jessica! I read the story called The Unlucky Tiger from your portfolio. I really liked how you wrote the tiger’s character for the story. The tiger’s gift of craftiness is quite pronounced and shown easily through his actions in the story. The moment when the tiger accidentally made the monkey’s head fall off when trying to wake her was a little shocking, which I think was probably the purpose. The tiger mentions that the monkey’s underestimated his strength, which also made me realize that I had done the same. The tiger does seem to quickly lose his strength soon after. I did not know he died when he collapsed until I read the author’s note. I wonder if there is a way to make it more clear what is happening to the tiger and why he is losing his strength suddenly? I am also curious if the cause of his death was simply the resurgence of all his previous injuries, or if something else is going on. I thought this story was very interesting and fun to read overall. I look forward to reading more stories from you!
ReplyDeleteHi, Jessica! First off, I have to say that I love the design of your blog and your website! I really appreciate that the link from your website to your comment wall is the first think the readers see, and it is very easy to find. I also like that you made the link itself kind of funny by suggesting that the person clicking it is there for a feedback assignment. I also read the story "The Unlucky Tiger" from your portfolio, and I thought you did wonderfully! Your writing is very creative and intricate, and it makes the story really easy to read and to picture in my mind like a movie. I do think that when the tiger made the monkeys head fall off was definitely unexpected, but I understand the logic and reasoning behind it. I am kind of sad that the tiger dies in the end, though. Maybe he would just go unconscious and then reappear in a later story? I really enjoyed reading your story! Overall, I think you did amazing and I look forward to reading more from you as this semester goes on!
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ReplyDeleteYour website is very crisp and clean, and I like the layout a lot. I read "The Unlucky Tiger" and I like that you combined a lot of stories with a common element. That's super creative, and you did it so seamlessly! Nothing seemed out of place, and you did a great job making it read so naturally. I wouldn't have known that it was several stories because I didn't read the Khasi myths, but to those who did, I'm sure it will be a little 'wink.' Your author's note does a good job of letting the rest of us in on it though. Great work!
Hi Jessica,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your website! I am in the Indian epics class and enjoyed reading stories based on stories from different places. The way you combined two stories in Congo was cool. I also liked how you developed the tiger's character; his ignorance becomes very apparent when he kills the monkey he loves from not know his own strength! Do the human come back into the story at any point? Were they just mentioned at the beginning to show the tiger's character? Maybe you could expand on the relationship between the tiger and the monkey a little more so that it is more tragic when the monkey dies. This might play with the reader heart strings a little more. Also, why did the monkey lie about who was singing? Is the bug important in some way? I did like the visual of a tiny bug playing a concert for a large tiger. Great job!
Hi Jessica, first of all, I would love to get a tiny bit of an introduction your page, a simple, "this is a collection of stories I have written during the semester" would be enough, and maybe even a brief overview of each story? I really like your use of the author's note! The way that you talk through your thought process when you were writing the story makes me feel like I am sitting in the room with you and having a conversation. I also like how you are combining multiple stories, it makes it even more unique and more of an interesting read! Because I would not be able to read the same story on probably anyone's blog or re write of the same stories.
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Hello Jessica, I really enjoyed reading your story “The Other Daughter.” Your story about the daughter that seemed to fall short compared to her sister actually reminded me of Cinderella in a sense, especially since there was also a prince in this story. I really like the way you wrote your story, the tone of it really gives off a teenage presence, which really helped the story be more relatable and easier to read. The story also flowed very well throughout which was really good. For your portfolio, I think that it looks really good! All your pictures really give the reader a good sense of the story before reading it. Also everything is organized very well throughout the whole portfolio. The only thing I would really suggest is maybe add a slight introduction to your cover page, just so the readers get a sense of what they are going to be getting into.
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica, I have just read your first two stories on your storybook and I have to say I really enjoyed them both! I think it is so unique that you decided to mesh up multiple stories to write one story, and you did so very well! For your first story on the tiger, I had actually written a story based off of one of the stories you used so it was cool being able to read through it and recognize where you got it from. I particularly enjoyed your second story that was written like a diary. While I have not read any of the stories you referenced that one off of, the way you wrote it gave me a good sense of what was going on and it really seemed as if some young lady was writing in her diary, ranting. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Jessica! In response to your Khasi story, I thought it was very interesting to see how the tiger had gained the strengths that it has today that allows it to be so dominant in the food chain. I will have to say that I was a little lost towards the end of the story when his sister was added into the mix, as I feel like her entrance into the story left the part of the story with the tiger king and his monkey bride unresolved. Was the hookah supposed to help him heal or cope with the trauma that he endured? Maybe you can expand on why he was disappointed by the fact that there was no fire. Also, how did things go back to normal after getting attacked by the monkeys and then the tigers began to affect him again? Was this physical pain triggered by his anger for his sister?
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ReplyDeleteI read the three stories that are currently on your portfolio website. I enjoyed all of them, especially the Khasi and Cherokee stories. I do think that it would be nice to add a little bit more to your home page to just kind of explain what your project is, but it's not a big deal. I liked how for the Khasi story you combined multiple stories about a tiger into one story about the same tiger. While reading the story, I was kind of confused about why so many different things kept happening to the tiger, but after reading the author's note it made a lot more sense. I also enjoyed the sports commentary that you wrote for the Cherokee story. I look forward to reading more of that story and seeing what happens in the Mammals vs Birds match if you decide to go back and revise that story.
Hey Jessica! I really liked how you combined multiple stories for the Khasi story. I never thought to combine multiple shorter stories into a single tale, and you did a phenomenal job of doing so! The way you weaved each of them together was seamless and well done. Your Congo story also was an exciting story to read through. I liked the first-person narrative style you used, as well as the more light-hearted writing you decided to use. The way you would begin to over-explain something, such as the taffy references, was perfect and made the story that much more entertaining to read through. This also extends to your Cherokee story. I love how all three have a different writing style, the Khasi as a more traditional story, and now this one as a transcription. This one was especially fun to read, as I felt like I was actually watching a sporting event! Great job!
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ReplyDeleteI thought you had some very creative stories here! My favorites were The Unlucky Tiger and Cherokee. I haven't read any of the original stories but from simply reading your rendition I knew you had drawn some good parallels to the originals. With the Cherokee story I thought your story idea was very creative and I can appreciate the time it took to write it out in that format. For The Unlucky Tiger story I thought it could use a little explanation of why the monkey family acted the way they did. I felt as though their treatment of the tiger was surprising to me because he hadn't had any kind of interaction with them earlier in the story. With that being said I know that monkeys are traditionally a little tricky and pesky so I can see why they would behave the way they did with that stereotype in mind. I thought you did an excellent job of picking out photos that really fit with the stories and gave readers a good visual representation of the characters. Overall, great writing here!